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Proportion of music sales by method

Proportion of music sales by method K0R6L
The line graph illustrates three methods of how people buy music from 2011 to 2018. Overall, both downloads and CDs purchased declined during the five-year period. In contrast, there has been a significant rise in streaming music since 2011. Purchase of CDs accounted for nearly half in 2011, which was about ten times as many as streaming music. At the same time, 35% of people downloaded music. When CD purchased started to decrease, both the streaming of music and downloads started to increase. However, downloads dropped by 10% from 2014 to 2018. Meanwhile, there was a growth of 30% in streaming. In general, there was a clear trend in the streaming music. It represented the greatest percentage in 2018.
The line graph illustrates three methods of how
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people
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buy
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music
from 2011 to 2018.

Overall
, both downloads and CDs
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purchased
declined during the five-year period.
In contrast
, there has been a significant rise in
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streaming
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music
since 2011.

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Purchase
of CDs accounted for
nearly
half in 2011, which was about ten times as
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many
as
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streaming
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music
. At the same time, 35% of
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people
downloaded
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music
. When CD
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purchased
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started
to decrease, both the
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streaming
of
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music
and downloads
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started
to increase.
However
, downloads dropped by 10% from 2014 to 2018. Meanwhile, there was a growth of 30% in streaming.

In general
, there was a
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clear
trend in the
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streaming
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music
. It represented the greatest percentage in 2018.
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IELTS academic Proportion of music sales by method

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