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TRENDS OVER THE TIME. CINEMA ATTENDEES

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The graph shows the rate at which British people attended the cinema once a month or more by age over an 18-year period from 1984 to 2002. The figures are given as percentages of the population. Overall, there was a surge in the number of cinema attendees. Nearly 60 % of British people between 15-24 were going to the cinema once per month at least by 1999. The figures for the ages between 25-34 and under 14 dropped the same year. The only age that rose steadily until 2002 was the age group 35 years old and over audience. If we look at the trends over time, we can see that the under-34 audience experienced a fluctuating up and down trajectory. For example, the youngest age group initially shot up to around 15 per cent in 1985, and then the same age group saw a gradual decline from 1986 to 1988. This cycle repeats itself over the years. The over-35s continue to increase; it will certainly be interesting to see when the peak is reached.
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the rate at which British
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attended the cinema once a month or more by
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age
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an 18-year period from 1984 to 2002. The figures are
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as percentages of the population.

Overall
, there was a surge in the number of cinema attendees.
Nearly
60 % of British
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people
between 15-24 were going to the cinema once per month at least by 1999. The figures for the
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between 25-34 and under 14 dropped the same year. The
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that rose
steadily
until 2002 was the
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group 35 years
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audience.

If we look at the trends
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time, we can
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that the under-34 audience experienced a fluctuating up and down trajectory.
For example
, the youngest
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group
initially
shot up to around 15 per cent in 1985, and then the same
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group
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a gradual decline from 1986 to 1988. This cycle repeats itself
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the years.

The
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continue to increase; it will
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be interesting to
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when the peak
is reached
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IELTS academic TRENDS OVER THE TIME. CINEMA ATTENDEES

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