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The graphs provided the data of the amount earned by graduates of different age groups from 21 until 60 years old. We can analyze in the graph, we can divide based on the qualification degree and age. Overall, there is a huge gap between the youngest age and the oldest age. In the graphs, there was a significant rise when people got older. Each qualification degree starts around 300 pound to 400 pound at the age of 21- 25, in this period people from other qualifications earned more than higher and first degree. The amount rocketed when 26 until 30 years old around 600 pounds to 800 pound. For people in first degree and other the amount earned are dropped slightly in 46 - 50 years old. Meanwhile, the higher degree climbed gradually to almost 800 pound in 56 - 60. To sum up, people with higher degrees get more earned than first degree or others in 56 - 60 years old.
The graphs provided the data of the amount
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different
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age
groups from 21 until 60 years
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old
. We can analyze in the graph, we can divide based on the qualification
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degree
and
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age
.
Overall
, there is a huge gap between the youngest
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age
and the oldest
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age
. In the graphs, there was a significant rise when
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people
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got
older. Each qualification
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degree
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starts
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300 pound
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400 pound
at the
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age
of
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21- 25
, in this period
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people
from other qualifications
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earned
more than higher and
first
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degree
. The amount rocketed when 26 until 30 years
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old
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600 pounds
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800 pound
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people
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first
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degree
and other the amount
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earned
are dropped
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in
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46 - 50
years
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old
. Meanwhile, the higher
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degree
climbed
gradually
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800 pound
in
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56 - 60
. To sum up,
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people
with higher
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degrees
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get
more
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earned
than
first
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degree
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56 - 60
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IELTS academic Practice test 1 bla bla bla

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
162 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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