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Holding of electrical appliances

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The line graph under represent the diminish in holding of electrical appliances and volume of time consumed doing housekeeping in households in one country from 1920 to 2019. As can be seen in the graph, The demand for refrigerators rose dramatically between nineteen hundred and twenty to two hundred and nineteen. Overall, The percentage of household illustration depicts that refrigerators have an upward trend. Also vacuum cleaners have a peak trend that is present in the figure. While washing machine appliances have fluctuated in a rising trend. The proportion of house machinery has grown year by year. From 1920 to 1940, Refrigerators, washing machines and vacuum cleaners interest increased by more than a half quarter. After 1940 till 1960, Refrigerators popularity soared by more then three quarters and vacuum cleaners had a slight improvement. Then between 1960 and 1980, Refrigerators and vacuum cleaners sustained lift. In 1980, Refrigerators gained a significant majority and vacuum cleaners achieved a very large proportion climb which continued till 2019. However, The washing machine, 1960 after had a palpitate trend. The amount of hours of housework per week has declined by 1920 to 2019. The picture of housework per hours statistics is shown by washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning works. In 1920, The count of hours per week was half a quarter. But, In 1940 statistics of hours per week dropped by slightly more than a quarter. Between 1960 and 2019, The figure had a wave downward trend.
The line graph
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under represent
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the diminish
in holding of electrical appliances and

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volume
of time consumed doing housekeeping in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.

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seen
in the graph, The demand for
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refrigerators
rose
dramatically
between nineteen hundred and twenty to two hundred and nineteen.
Overall
, The percentage of household illustration depicts that
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refrigerators
have an upward trend.
Also
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vacuum
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cleaners
have a peak trend
that is
present in the figure.
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While
washing machine appliances have fluctuated in a rising trend.

The proportion of
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house
machinery has grown year by year. From 1920 to 1940,
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Refrigerators
, washing machines and
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vacuum
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cleaners
interest increased by more than a half
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quarter
. After 1940 till 1960,
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Refrigerators
popularity soared by more
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then
three
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quarters
and
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vacuum
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cleaners
had a slight improvement. Then between 1960 and 1980,
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Refrigerators
and
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vacuum
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cleaners
sustained lift. In 1980,
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Refrigerators
gained a significant majority and
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vacuum
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cleaners
achieved a
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very
large proportion climb which continued till 2019.
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, The washing machine, 1960 after had
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a palpitate
trend.

The amount of
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hours
of housework per week has declined by 1920 to 2019. The picture of housework per
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hours
statistics
is shown
by washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning works. In 1920, The count of
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hours
per week was half a
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quarter
.
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But
, In 1940 statistics of
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hours
per week dropped by
slightly
more than a
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quarter
. Between 1960 and 2019, The figure had a wave downward trend.

IELTS academic Holding of electrical appliances

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
244 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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