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The bar chart presents a comparison of the different types of post-school qualifications held by men and women in Australia during a one year period in 1999. Overall, men seemed to prefer either vocation focused diplomas or the more higher studies such as post-graduate diplomas or master's degrees while women appeared to be dominating when it comes to undergraduate diplomas. Interestingly, the stark contrast between men and women and their academic preferences seemed to nearly balance in the case of bachelor's degrees. There was a general preference for either skilled vocational diplomas or post-graduate diplomas and master's degrees at the other end of the spectrum, by men. Skilled vocational diplomas were overwhelmingly popular with men with a 90% male and 10% female break-up between the two sexes. Similarly, women clearly seemed to prefer undergraduate diplomas, with a 70% female and 35% male ratio. However, their appeared to be a more even split between men and women in the case of bachelor's degrees wherein 50% of the women and 45% of the men chose to opt for one.
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in Australia during a
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seemed to prefer either vocation focused
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diplomas
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appeared to be dominating when it
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and their academic preferences seemed to
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diplomas
or post-graduate
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and master's degrees at the other
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. Skilled vocational
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popular with
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with a 90% male and 10% female break-up between the two sexes.
Similarly
,
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clearly
seemed to prefer undergraduate
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, with a 70% female and 35% male ratio.
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, their appeared to be a more even split between
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men
and
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in the case of bachelor's degrees wherein 50% of the
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and 45% of the
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chose to opt for one.
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IELTS academic Post-School Qualifications

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6.0
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