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Positive or negative development?

Positive or negative development? MrOVk
Nowadays the internet is developing very well and it can be beneficial everyone. Many universities are proffer their online lessons for learners. Although, others claim that it is a negative statement i personally believe that the advantages of online learning outweight it is disadvantages. On the one hand, others opine that Young learners can not feel the responsibility of study for instance, when students are while learning online, other social media can be disturbing. Moreover learners can not meet their group mates it is more fun, spend time with friends as well as learn in a one group. On the other hand, there are a lot of positive sites of learning in distance. A good illustration of this is students have more flexible time for them selves they can study at any time they want. Furthermore for the people who have financial difficulties also have opportunity to study. In other words they do not pay out money on daily expenses. In conclusion, with the study online. i tend to education online, as well as it is facilities for the learners
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well and it can be beneficial everyone.
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online
lessons for
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learners
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statement
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personally
believe that the advantages of
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learning
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outweight
it is disadvantages. On the one hand, others opine that Young
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learners
can not feel the responsibility of
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for instance
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,
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social media can be disturbing.

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meet
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as well
as learn in a one group. On the
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hand, there are
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sites of learning in distance. A
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illustration of this is students have more flexible time for
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at any time they want.
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Furthermore
for the
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people
who have financial difficulties
also
have opportunity to
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. In
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words they do not pay out money on daily expenses.
In conclusion
, with the
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online
.
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tend to education
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as it is facilities for the
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learners

IELTS academic Positive or negative development?

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
179 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.0
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