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percentages of the donated funds to beneficence through the years 1990 and 2010 in the United Kingdom.

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This graph shows the percentages of the donated funds to beneficence through the years 1990 and 2010 in the United Kingdom. In a general overview the highest funds are in the ages of 36-50 years old, the ages with less quantities are between the 18-25 years old; there are also seemed differences in the 2 years of the results, the majority decrease, but some of them increase. The lowest point of the results is in the ages of 18-25 years old, by comparing the first year and the last of the graph we can see that the quantity of money given decreases even more.

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IELTS academic percentages of the donated funds to beneficence through the years 1990 and 2010 in the United Kingdom.

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