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The bar chart below illustrates the proportion of labor force dividing by five main fields in UK in the years 1841 and 2011. It was clear that the percentage of workforce in both services and constructions increased in the 70 years period while the employment rate in manufacturing, agriculture, and energy dropped. In 1841, manufacturing was the most popular job, which was about 36%. Services and agriculture industries were also popular, When it came to 2011, services became the dominant job. The percentage of workers who worked in services exceeded 80%. There was also an increase in construction
The bar chart below illustrates the proportion of labor force dividing by five main fields in UK in the years 1841 and 2011.

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that the percentage of workforce in both
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and constructions increased in the 70 years period while the employment rate in manufacturing, agriculture, and energy dropped.

In 1841, manufacturing was the most popular job, which was about 36%.
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Services
and agriculture industries were
also
popular,

When it came to 2011,
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services
became the dominant job. The percentage of workers who worked in
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services
exceeded 80%. There was
also
an increase in
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construction

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