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Percentage of foodstuffs and other goods

Percentage of foodstuffs and other goods DoqAa
The given bar graph depicts the expenses of people in three European nations spend on food and other goods from the year of 1998 to 2008. Overall, it can be vividly seen that the proportion of food items and other goods purchased by all countries increased in 2008 compared to 1998. As can be observed from the illustration the ratio of food and other items were bought by people at 15% and 8% respectively in France. However the proportion of both items were identical at 40% in 2008. Moreover in 1998 the inhabitants of Germany were consumed food and other items were 25% and 16% approx whereas by 2008 portion accounting for 30% and nearly 25%. Moving towards England the percentage of foodstuffs and other goods were 10% and 7% in 1998 as it can be clearly seen that it was declined by 3%. On the contrary in 2008 the items experience a significant rise which were 35%.
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given
bar graph depicts the expenses of
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people
in three European nations spend on
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food
and
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other
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goods
from the year of 1998 to 2008.

Overall
, it can be
vividly
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seen
that the proportion of
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food
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items
and
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other
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goods
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purchased
by all countries increased in 2008 compared to 1998.

As can
be observed
from the illustration the ratio of
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food
and
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other
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items
were
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bought
by
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people
at 15% and 8%
respectively
in France.
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However
the proportion of both
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items
were identical at 40% in 2008.
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Moreover
in 1998 the inhabitants of Germany
were consumed
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food
and
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other
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items
were 25% and 16% approx whereas by 2008 portion accounting for 30% and
nearly
25%.

Moving towards England the percentage of foodstuffs and
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other
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goods
were 10% and 7% in 1998 as it can be
clearly
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seen
that it
was declined
by 3%.
On the contrary
in 2008 the
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items
experience a significant rise which were 35%.
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IELTS academic Percentage of foodstuffs and other goods

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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