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Perceived and Actual Crime in 2009 and 2010

Perceived and Actual Crime in 2009 and 2010 EqKab
In graph, perceived and actual ratio of burglary, car and violent crimes between 2009 to 2011 is illustrated. According to burglary, car and violent crimes, Burglary crime is almost 3% happened in 2010/2011. Similarly, car crimes are almost 4% and people are more afraid. Violent crimes are lesser than car crimes. According to the crime ratio, the car crimes are more happened and the burglary are lesser.
In graph, perceived and actual ratio of
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burglary
,
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car
and violent
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crimes
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 2009 and 2011".
between 2009 to 2011
is illustrated
. According to
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burglary
,
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car
and violent
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crimes
,
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Burglary
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crime
is almost 3% happened in 2010/2011.
Similarly
,
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car
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crimes
are almost 4% and
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people
are more afraid. Violent
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crimes
are lesser than
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car
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crimes
. According to the
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crime
ratio, the
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car
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crimes
are more happened and the
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burglary
are lesser.
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IELTS academic Perceived and Actual Crime in 2009 and 2010

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
67 words
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