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he table compare the reasons of people no longer smoke and the period they tend to continue. Overall, more smoker pay attention to their health and decide to avoid smoking totally. As the first table illustrates that the number of people giving up smoke for pursuing better physical fitness is 71%, which is the highest and can be occupied by 64%, 73%, 74% for people above 20, 10-19, and younger than 10. On contrary, the proportion of people recon finance problems and wishing less risk caused by smoke are almost between 25% and 30%. Other accounts are less than this period number, but above 10%.
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compare the reasons of
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no longer smoke and the period they tend to continue.
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As the
first
table illustrates that the number of
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people
giving up smoke for pursuing better physical fitness is 71%, which is the highest and can
be occupied
by 64%, 73%, 74% for
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people
above 20, 10-19, and younger than 10. On contrary, the proportion of
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recon finance problems and wishing less
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caused by smoke are almost between 25% and 30%. Other accounts are less than this period number,
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IELTS academic people who smoke and why they do

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
105 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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