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people who are visited to car Museum year before refurbishmnet and after the completion of refubishment

people who are visited to car Museum year before refurbishmnet and after the completion of refubishment oxOLK

The two pie charts illustrate that number of people who are visited to car Museum year before refurbishment and after the completion of refurbishment. Surveys that are conducted on the same two time periods how they were satisfied. Overall, during the year prior refurbishment and after almost 166000 visitors stepped in the art Centre whereas there is no significant change in the satisfied people as well not respond tourists. Firstly there is huge downfall in the dissatisfied ones even though there is a raise in after renovation. There is a equal percentage in no reply because of their own priorities. In raise of dissatisfaction somewhere results variations takes place whenever new placements are doesn't attract them. In some cases they might be use their own time rather than spending for public. In order that, after completion of new works very dissatisfied public reviews fall down by half. Any how very satisfied doubled almost if they are happy to see again.

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