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The chart shows the number of UK tourists visiting two countries from 2010 to 2013

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The given chart illustrates the total amount of UK tourists travelling to Thailand and Greece between year 2010 and 2013. Overall, the number of British travelers to Thailand had a gradual decline in 2011 and then rapidly increased over the period of 2011 to 2013. On the other hand Greece showed sharp rise from 2010 to 2011 and there was a steep decline in 2012. Total number of UK travelers to Thailand was 3. 5 million in 2010 and decreased to 3 million in 2011. From that stage, gradually rose to 4 million respectively. However, Greece demonstrated significant different way than Thailand. It shows a fluctuating graph over 4 years. Sum of the travelers were 2. 5 million in the beginning and rose up to the peak of 4. 4 million. Number of travelers in 2012 was the lowest figure(1. 8 million) over the period and dramatically increased up to 3 million.
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chart illustrates the total amount of UK tourists travelling to Thailand and Greece between year 2010 and 2013.
Overall
, the number of British
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travelers
to Thailand had a gradual decline in 2011 and then
rapidly
increased over the period of 2011 to 2013.
On the other hand
Greece
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showed
sharp rise from 2010 to 2011 and there was a steep decline in 2012. Total number of UK
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travelers
to Thailand was 3. 5
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million
in 2010 and decreased to 3
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million
in 2011. From that stage,
gradually
rose to 4
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million
respectively
.
However
, Greece demonstrated significant
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different
way than Thailand. It
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shows
a fluctuating graph over 4 years. Sum of the
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travelers
were 2. 5
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million
in the beginning and rose up to the peak of 4. 4
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million
. Number of
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travelers
in 2012 was the lowest figure(1. 8
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million)
over the period and
dramatically
increased up to 3
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million
.
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