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Overall, in all five countries, citizens spend the highest proportion of their income on food and drink and housing and significantly less on clothing and entertainment

Overall, in all five countries, citizens spend the highest proportion of their income on food and drink and housing and significantly less on clothing and entertainment Ykbor
The table compares the percentage of household expenditure in terms of food and drinks, housing, clothing, and entertainment, which residents in five different European nations spend each month. Overall, in all five countries, inhabitants spend the highest proportion of their income on food and drink, and housing. Whereas it significantly less on clothing and entertainment. As can be seen from the table, While the proportion of spending in France, Germany, and the UK just account for 25%, 22%, and 27%, respectively, housing expenditure represents 31%, 33%, 37%, which the highest percentage in all the table. Citizens in Turkey and Spain, on the other hand, spend much of their money on food and drink rather than housing with 36% of the Turkey people and 31% by the Spanish. The figure for housing income is just 20% for Turkey and Spain, 18%. Regarding clothing and entertainment, inhabitants spend less money as a percentage of their income on clothing and entertainment. They spend only 7% and 8% of their earnings on clothing in France and Spain, respectively. The remaining countries account for less than 15% of the total. Consequently, in these five nations, the average amount spent on entertainment ranged from 10% to 19% of overall expenditure. The British, in particular, spend 11% on clothing and entertainment.
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account for 25%, 22%, and 27%,
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20% for Turkey and Spain, 18%.

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less money as a percentage of their income on clothing and entertainment. They
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7% and 8% of their earnings on clothing in France and Spain,
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IELTS academic Overall, in all five countries, citizens spend the highest proportion of their income on food and drink and housing and significantly less on clothing and entertainment

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