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Annual earnings of three bakeries

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The line graph gives information about the income of three different bakeries in London, over the period 10 years, from 200 to 2010. Overall, there are upward trends in the income of both Bernie’s Buns and Robbie’s Bakery, while there is a downward trend in the earnings of Lovely Loaves. In addition, the yearly income of Lovely Loaves was the most in 2000, but was the least in 2010. In 2000, the earnings of Robbie’s Bakery was almost 55000 $ and it did not change until 2005, while the earnings of Bernie’s Buns saw significantly fluctuated in 2003, and remained steady in 2005. The earnings of Robbie’s Bakery then considerably increased and reached just over 100000$ in 2010, whereas the incoming of Bernie’s Buns continued the same with Robbie’s Bakery. The income of Lovely Loaves was about 82000$ in 2000, but then it considerably fluctuated and down at 40000$ in 2008m and leveled out until 2010.
The line graph gives information about the
income
of three
different
bakeries in London, over the period 10 years, from 200 to 2010.

Overall
, there are upward trends in the
income
of both Bernie’s Buns and Robbie’s Bakery, while there is a downward trend in the
earnings
of Lovely Loaves.
In addition
, the yearly
income
of Lovely Loaves was the most in 2000,
but
was the least in 2010.

In 2000, the
earnings
of Robbie’s Bakery was almost
55000 $
and it did not
change
until 2005, while the
earnings
of Bernie’s Buns
saw
significantly
fluctuated in 2003, and remained steady in 2005. The
earnings
of Robbie’s Bakery then
considerably
increased and reached
just
over
100000$
in 2010, whereas the incoming of Bernie’s Buns continued the same with Robbie’s Bakery.

The
income
of Lovely Loaves was about
82000$
in 2000,
but
then it
considerably
fluctuated and down at
40000$
in
2008m
and leveled out until 2010.
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