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Overall, a common air balloon comprises two main parts: a big envelope and some simple equipment users can access to change their height based on the thermal regulation of air.

Overall, a common air balloon comprises two main parts: a big envelope and some simple equipment users can access to change their height based on the thermal regulation of air. RwVaG
The diagram shows the equipment and operation of a hot air balloon. Overall, a common air balloon comprises two main parts: a big envelope and some simple equipment users can access to change their height based on the thermal regulation of air. With regard to the construction of an air balloon, its upper part resembles an inverted onion, with the parachute valve at the top to allow users to control the rate at which hot air escapes. The envelope also consists of many 'gores', under whose coatings are a large number of panels. The lower part of the air balloon includes a skirt attached to a basket by ropes. There is a burner attached to the strap of the basket and two propane tanks inside of it. Turning next to how the balloon works, propane is released from the two containers, and is mixed with air, and the mixture is ignited by means of a burner, creating a flame. As the temperature inside the envelope increases, the air inside gets lighter, pulling the balloon upward. In order to fly lower, users can reduce how much propane and air are burned so that the envelope is filled with more cool air, which is heavier and consequently pulls the balloon downward.
The diagram
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shows
the equipment and operation of a hot
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air
balloon.

Overall
, a common
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air
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balloon
comprises two main parts: a
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big
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envelope
and
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some
simple equipment users can access to
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change
their height based on the thermal regulation of air.

With regard to the construction of an
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air
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balloon
, its upper part resembles an inverted onion, with the parachute valve at the top to
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allow
users to control the rate at which hot
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air
escapes. The
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envelope
also
consists of
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many
'gores', under whose coatings are
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a large number of
panels. The lower part of the
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air
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balloon
includes a skirt attached to a basket by ropes. There is a burner attached to the strap of the basket and two propane tanks
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inside of
it.

Turning
next
to how the
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balloon
works, propane
is released
from the two containers, and
is mixed
with
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air
, and the mixture
is ignited
by means of a burner, creating a flame. As the temperature inside the
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envelope
increases, the
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air
inside
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gets
lighter, pulling the
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balloon
upward. In order to
fly
lower, users can
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reduce
how much propane and
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air
are burned
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so
that the
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envelope
is filled
with more cool
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air
, which is heavier and
consequently
pulls the
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balloon
downward.
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IELTS academic Overall, a common air balloon comprises two main parts: a big envelope and some simple equipment users can access to change their height based on the thermal regulation of air.

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6.0
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