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old population aged 65 are living in Canada, Germany, and the UK, in 1980, 2000

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The chart demonstrates the percentages of the old population aged 65 and over who are living in Canada, Germany, and the UK, in 1980, 2000, and forecasted numbers for 2030. In general, Germany’s population had the largest percentage of people aged 65 and over. Also, the predicted figures for 2030 show that Canada will see an escalation in the elderly population. In 1980, 10% of the Canadian population was aged 65 and over. This proportion had risen to 15% by the year 2000, the same amount as the UK. While the figure for Germany was approximately 14% in 1980 and rising to 20% by 2000. Forecasted figures for 2030 show that Canada will see a larger increase of 7% by 2030, which will be around 22% of their population aged 65 and over. Meanwhile, about 25% of the German population is predicted to be aged 65 and over by the year 2030.
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who are living in Canada, Germany, and the UK, in 1980, 2000, and forecasted numbers for 2030.

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an escalation in the elderly population.

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. This proportion had risen to 15% by the year 2000, the same amount as the UK. While the figure for Germany was approximately 14% in 1980 and rising to 20% by 2000.

Forecasted figures for 2030
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