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Number of enquiries received from January to June in 2011

Number of enquiries received from January to June in 2011 G9X92
This line graph elucidates the number of requests received for clarification by the the tourist information office from January to June(6 months) in 2011 in 3 ways. Overall, the graph shows the ways in which enquiries are received(in person, by letter/email and by telephone). It can be observed that the number of enquiries received surged from January to June whereas they were dropped gradually for letter/email. It can be also be depicted that in person enquires are at peak than every other means. The number of enquiries received in person rose from nearly 420 to 1900 from January to June. Similarly, enquiries received by telephone have a little increase from 900 to 1600 as compared with the in person enquiries. On the other hand, it can be seen that the number of enquiries by letter or email declined from 780 to 380 and the number of requests raised by telephone(850) had been higher in January but in June the number of requests raised in person(1900) is the highest
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tourist information office from January to June(6 months) in 2011 in 3 ways.

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enquiries
are received
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, by letter/email and by telephone). It can
be observed
that the
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number
of
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enquiries
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received
surged from January to June whereas they
were dropped
gradually
for letter/email. It can be
also
be depicted
that in
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person
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enquires
are at
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than every other means.

The
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enquiries
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received
in
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person
rose from
nearly
420 to 1900 from January to June.
Similarly
,
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enquiries
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received
by telephone have a
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increase from 900 to 1600 as compared with the in
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person
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enquiries
.

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that the
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of
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enquiries
by letter or email declined from 780 to 380 and the
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of requests raised by telephone(850) had been higher in January
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in June the
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number
of requests raised in
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person(1900)
is the highest

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