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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British aged over 65 in 1985 and makes forecasts for the next 50 years.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British aged over 65 in 1985 and makes forecasts for the next 50 years. Overall, it can be seen that there was a significant rise for all UK countries in both of the years 1985 and 2035 for five nations of the UK. In 1985, 15% of the UK population was over 65, but by 2035, this will make up 23% of the total residents. Similarly, England has the same trend as the UK from 1985 to 2035, 15% and 23%, respectively. In the group of UK countries, Wales maintained the highest figure since 1985 with 16% and the 2035's prediction with 26%. Followed by Scotland and Northern Ireland, their proportions were 14% and 13% in 1985, and they will rise dramatically to 25% and 24%, respectively. It is clear that although the rate in 1985 was the lowest, after 50 years Northern Ireland will be on par with EL and the UK. The figure for Wales is still the highest in both the past and future.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British aged over 65 in 1985 and
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makes
forecasts for the
next
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Overall
, it can be
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seen
that there was a significant rise for all UK countries in both of the years 1985 and 2035 for five nations of the UK. In 1985, 15% of the UK population was over 65,
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by 2035, this will
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make
up 23% of the total residents.
Similarly
, England has the same trend as the UK from 1985 to 2035, 15% and 23%,
respectively
. In the group of UK countries, Wales maintained the highest figure since 1985 with 16% and the 2035's prediction with 26%. Followed by Scotland and Northern Ireland, their proportions were 14% and 13% in 1985, and they will rise
dramatically
to 25% and 24%,
respectively
.

It is
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clear
that although the rate in 1985 was the lowest, after 50 years Northern Ireland will be on par with
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and the UK. The figure for Wales is
still
the highest in both the past and future.
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