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more and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas.

more and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas. N3K5b
There is an increasing number of people living in accommodations with tiny atmospheres or no open-air places in the city. From my point of view, there are both harmful advancements and positive effects, and I will show this in this essay. On the one hand, living in small houses without gardens or yards influences family union. This is because people reduce the distance between themselves and their family members while resorts or luxury houses do not have a chance to do this necessary gathering. As well as this, parents tend to spend their leisure time playing with their children instead of sleeping or going shopping if they live in small houses. To illustrate, my father taught me to control the ball in my house in my childhood, and as a result, I currently play football as well as a football player. On the other hand, it does seem reasonable to say that without open-air places, students are prevented from playing outdoor activities. Consequently, pupils will be dependent on the virtual lives on gaming, social media such as Facebook, Instagram, … An alarming issue associated with this being without outdoor areas is that while parents are being up to their ears in work or chores, children have to play video games with their buddies all day instead of playing sports. A good example related to this is that students in urban areas tend to prefer games to those who live in the countryside. In conclusion, I believe that the positive influences outweigh the negative advancement if people choose to live in homes with undersized spaces or without outdoor regions.
There is an increasing number of
people
living in accommodations with tiny atmospheres or no open-air places in the city. From my point of view, there are both harmful advancements and
positive
effects, and I will
show
this in this essay.

On the one hand, living in
small
houses
without gardens or yards influences family union. This is
because
people
reduce
the distance between themselves and their family members while resorts or luxury
houses
do not have a chance to do this necessary gathering.
As well
as this, parents tend to spend their leisure time playing with their children
instead
of sleeping or going shopping if they
live
in
small
houses
. To illustrate, my father taught me to control the ball in my
house
in my childhood, and
as a result
, I
currently
play football
as well
as a football player.

On the other hand
, it does seem reasonable to say that without open-air places, students are
prevented
from playing outdoor activities.
Consequently
, pupils will be dependent on the virtual
lives
on gaming, social media such as Facebook, Instagram, … An alarming issue associated with this being without outdoor areas is that while parents are being up to their ears in work or chores, children
have to
play video games with their buddies all day
instead
of playing sports. A
good
example related to this is that students in urban areas tend to prefer games to those who
live
in the countryside.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
positive
influences outweigh the
negative
advancement if
people
choose to
live
in homes with undersized spaces or without outdoor regions.
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