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Money spent on books in four countries

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The graph demonstrates books' expenditures in four different countries throughout a decade in US dollars. To begin, it is clear that the highest proportion of people who read was in Germany during the period, but experienced slight fluctuation in 2003 amounted to 75 millions, in contrast the lowest rate of book expenses was in Australia from 1995 to 2001, but the trend rose considerably in 2002 and a hefty 60 million dollars were spent on book by australian population. In terms of France, the book population climbed gradually from 65 millions to 75 millions, increased by mere 10 millions in 2001. More people in France prefer books than in Italy. When it come to Italian, the sharp decrease occured in 1997, where book industry lost humble 5 millions. Overall, the data indicates that Germany had the highest book expenses by 2003.
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countries throughout a decade in US dollars. To
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who read was in Germany during the period,
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experienced slight fluctuation in 2003 amounted to 75
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,
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the lowest rate of
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book
expenses was in Australia from 1995 to 2001,
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the trend rose
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in 2002 and a hefty 60
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dollars
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on
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by
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australian
population. In terms of France, the
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population climbed
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from 65
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to 75
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, increased by mere 10
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in 2001. More
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people
in France prefer
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than in Italy. When it
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to Italian, the sharp decrease
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in 1997, where
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book
industry lost humble 5
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, the data indicates that Germany had the highest
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expenses by 2003.

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