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Picture blue suit changes of a park from 1980 to now.

Picture blue suit changes of a park from 1980 to now. gWdpl
The two maps illustrate the main changes which have taken place in the park between 1980 and present. overall, it can be clearly seen that the radical changes have witnessed in the park, with bush picnic chairs in now time. To begin with, there was one pathway running through the park from the west gate to the South gate. Secondly, the trees were located in the north-east of the park and flower were planted along the south wall moreover there was also a pond and several beach around it on the west side of the park. however, the path was removed and replaced with a new path which led to all four side of the park. Apart from that, the pond and beach are still intact but flower area have been replaced with versus. Additionally, a new picnic area with table and barbecue has been set up in the original site of the trees.
The two maps illustrate the main
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changes
which have taken place in the
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park
between 1980 and present.

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overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that the radical
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changes
have witnessed in the
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park
, with bush picnic chairs in
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now
time.

To
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begin
with, there was one pathway running through the
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park
from the west gate to the South gate.
Secondly
, the trees
were located
in the north-east of the
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park
and flower
were planted
along the south wall
moreover
there was
also
a pond and several beach around it on the west side of the park.

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however
, the path
was removed
and replaced with a new path which led to all four side of the
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park
. Apart from that, the pond and beach are
still
intact
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but
flower area have
been replaced
with versus.
Additionally
, a new picnic area with table and barbecue has
been set
up in the original site of the trees.
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IELTS academic Picture blue suit changes of a park from 1980 to now.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
154 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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