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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. 8d785
The given charts provide information about how much money travellers paying for plane tickets from Sydney to Melbourne and from Melbourne to Sydney on one airline during 2-week periods in the year 2013. In overall, after going up and down, the price of tickets for going between Sydney and Melbourne fell moderately and travellers could travel with cheaper price from Tuesday to Thursday. Initially, the amount of money consumed for tickets from Sydney to Melbourne was highest on Monday of the first week in 80 and then went down significantly to around 35 and stabilized to Thursday this week. After that, this figure dramatically rose to 75 on Friday and there was a remarkable fall in consecutive 5 days from from Sat to Wed and stopped at the same price compared with the data on Tue. After reaching 75 again on Thursday, the amount of money for tickets of this trip decreased to 50 on Sunday. In comparison with the price from Melbourne to Sydney, the price for this trip on Money was lower than from Sydney to Melbourne by 20. This figure plummeted to the same price with the price for a trip from Sydney to Melbourne on Tuesday and remained unchanged for 3 days. The data reached the highest price at 80 on Fri and went down to 35 from Tuesday to Thursday next week. Before remaining stable at 50 on Sat and Sun, this figure reached 60 on Friday.
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travellers
paying for
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plane
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tickets
from Sydney to Melbourne and from Melbourne to Sydney on one airline during
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2-week
periods in the year 2013.

In
overall
, after going up and down, the
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price
of
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tickets
for going between Sydney and Melbourne fell
moderately
and
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travellers
could travel with cheaper
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price
from Tuesday to Thursday.

Initially
, the amount of
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money
consumed for
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tickets
from Sydney to Melbourne was
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highest
on Monday of the
first
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week
in 80 and then went down
significantly
to around 35 and stabilized to Thursday this
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week
. After that, this figure
dramatically
rose to 75 on Friday and there was a remarkable fall in consecutive 5 days
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from from
Sat to Wed and
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stopped
at the same
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price
compared with the data on Tue. After reaching 75 again on Thursday, the amount of
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money
for
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tickets
of this trip decreased to 50 on Sunday.

In comparison
with the
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price
from Melbourne to Sydney, the
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price
for this trip on
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Money
was lower than from Sydney to Melbourne by 20. This figure plummeted to the same
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price
with the
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price
for a trip from Sydney to Melbourne on Tuesday and remained unchanged for 3 days. The data reached the highest
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price
at 80 on Fri and went down to 35 from Tuesday to Thursday
next
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week
.
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Before
remaining stable at 50 on Sat and Sun, this figure reached 60 on Friday.
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