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money given to the charity in the years 1990 and 2010, by the British community.

money given to the charity in the years 1990 and 2010, by the British community. jodlw

In the chart we can observe the percentage of the money given to the charity in the years 1990 and 2010, by the British community. Overall, you can notice how a huge amount of people had participated with charities and the cooperation given was adequate for the needs. However there was an increase in 2010 of the people between the ages of 51 to 65 in helping charities. The changes that I can notice in those 29 years are: That the sharp fall in 2010 from having a 15% to a 5% of the sufficient charities that were given by young people. In the case of the adults in 1990 the cooperation was still preferable. In 2010 there was a peak of 39% with senior citizens that are around the ages of 50 and 60. So it is clear that in the year of 1990 the steady growth never stopped and was more superior than the one of 2010, in most of the ages and time.

In the chart we can observe the percentage of the money This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 to the charity in the years 1990 and 2010, by the British community.

Overall
, you can notice how a huge amount of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 had participated with charities and the cooperation This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 was adequate for the needs. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 there was an increase in 2010 of the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 between the ages of 51 to 65 in helping charities.

The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 that I can notice in those 29 years are: That the sharp fall in 2010 from having a 15% to a 5% of the sufficient charities that were This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 by young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. In the case of the adults in 1990 the cooperation was still
 preferable. In 2010 there was a peak of 39% with senior citizens that are around the ages of 50 and 60.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that in the year of 1990 the steady growth never This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceaseddiscontinued
stopped
 and was The adjective 'more' is normally used with to and does not need 'more' (so called implicit comparative). Probably you need to write: "superior to".superior to
more superior than
 the one of 2010, in most of the ages and time. 