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Medal achievement of 3 countries in between 2004 and 2016

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The supplied bar graph enumerates the number of medals won by the 3 countries USA, Russia and China in the time span of 12 years ( 2004-2016). Overall, it is evident that Us had been the highest achiever in all these years. Firstly, as illustrated in the bar graph, in the year 2004 the number of medals achieved by US is 100 whereas Russia won medals in between 60 and 80. Similarly in the year 2008, 2012 and 2016 the achievement of US is increasing. But in case of Russia there is a downfall. Apart from US and Russia the achievement of China is sharply increasing from time to time. In 2016 US had achieved the highest number of medals while Russia had achieved the least
The supplied bar graph enumerates the number of
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medals
won by the 3 countries USA, Russia and China in the time span of 12 years
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(
2004-2016).
Overall
, it is evident that Us had been the highest achiever in all these years.
Firstly
, as illustrated in the bar graph, in the
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year
2004 the number of
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medals
achieved by US is 100 whereas Russia won
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medals
in between 60 and 80.
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Similarly
in the
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year
2008, 2012 and 2016 the achievement of US is increasing.
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But
in case of Russia there is a downfall. Apart from US and Russia the achievement of China is
sharply
increasing from time to time. In 2016 US had achieved the highest number of
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medals
while Russia had achieved the
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least
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IELTS academic Medal achievement of 3 countries in between 2004 and 2016

Academic
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1 paragraphs
125 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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