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Task 1 writing , table regarding fast food consumption

Task 1 writing, table regarding fast food consumption xOgP9
The table illustrates the variations in consumption of amounts of fast food, by the people of Melbourne in three different time periods. The data is recorded in units. Overall, in 2005 Hamburgers and Fried Chicken were highly popular when compared to the rest three and salad was preferred by very less people in that year. Whereas, the consumption of salads witnessed a strikingly upward trend and is predicted to reach its peak by 2025. In contrast, the consumption of Fried rice and noodles has slightly improved and is estimated to remain stable hereafter. Focusing, on Hamburgers and Fried Chicken their popularity experienced almost a similar trend, with 40 and 35 units in 2005 and 38 and 37 units at present. A few fluctuations are predicted and by 2025 they are expected to reach their highest figures of 51 units and 45 units of Hamburgers and Fried Chicken respectively. However, looking at salads people started eating more anmounts and the trend shows a striking upward pattern. The sales of salads jumped significantly from 5 units in 2005 to 15 units in 2021 which are estimated to surge rapidly to 41 units by 2025. Whereas, both the chinese fast foods reamined less popular with 6 units each in 2005 and the sales were forecasted to be levelled out at 9 units until 2005.
The table illustrates the variations in consumption of amounts of
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fast
food, by the
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people
of Melbourne in three
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different
time periods. The data
is recorded
in units.

Overall
, in 2005 Hamburgers and
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Fried
Chicken were
highly
popular when compared to the rest three and
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salad
was preferred
by
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very
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less
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people
in that year. Whereas, the consumption of
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salads
witnessed a
strikingly
upward trend and
is predicted
to reach its peak by 2025.
In contrast
, the consumption of
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Fried
rice and noodles has
slightly
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improved
and
is estimated
to remain stable hereafter.

Focusing, on Hamburgers and
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Fried
Chicken their popularity experienced almost a similar trend, with 40 and 35
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units
in 2005 and 38 and 37
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units
at present. A few fluctuations
are predicted
and by 2025 they are
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expected
to reach their highest figures of 51
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units
and 45
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units
of Hamburgers and
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Fried
Chicken
respectively
.

However
, looking at
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salads
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people
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started
eating more
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anmounts
and the trend
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shows
a striking upward pattern. The sales of
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salads
jumped
significantly
from 5
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units
in 2005 to 15
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units
in 2021 which
are estimated
to surge
rapidly
to 41
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units
by 2025. Whereas, both the
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chinese
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fast
foods
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reamined
less popular with 6
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units
each in 2005 and the sales
were forecasted
to
be levelled
out at 9
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units
until 2005.
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IELTS academic Task 1 writing, table regarding fast food consumption

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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