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map OF CITY HOSPITAL 2007 AND 2010

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THE GIVEN MAP ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT THE ROAD ACCESS TO CITY HOSPITAL IN 2007 AND IN 2010. OVERALL, IT CAN BE NOTICED THAT RING ROAD AS WELL AS HOSPITAL WILL REMAIN SAME REST OF THINGS WERE OCCUPIED WITH NEW THINGS. ON THE DEEPER ANALYSIS, BUS STOP WAS UNCHANGED WITH A ROUNDABOUT. FURTHERMORE, CITY HOSPITAL WAS REMAIN SAME AS COMPARED 2007. MOREOVER, IN NORTHEAST SIDE PUBLIC CAR PARK WAS OCCUPIED. APART FROM THIS, IN THE VACANT PLACE OF WEST SOUTH BUS STATION WAS BUILD. HOWEVER, HOSPITAL ROAD WAS ATTACHED WITH CAR PARK OR BUS STATION. WHILE, CAR PARK FOR STAFF IS REBUILT IN 2010. AS CONTRASTED 2007 MAP LOT OF THINGS WAS BUILT OR TRANSFERS AS WELL AS LOT OF THINGS IS OCCUPIED.
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GIVEN
MAP ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT THE ROAD ACCESS TO CITY
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HOSPITAL
IN 2007 AND IN 2010.
OVERALL
, IT CAN
BE NOTICED
THAT RING ROAD
AS WELL
AS
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HOSPITAL
WILL REMAIN SAME REST OF THINGS
WERE OCCUPIED
WITH NEW THINGS. ON THE DEEPER ANALYSIS, BUS
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STOP
WAS UNCHANGED
WITH A ROUNDABOUT.
FURTHERMORE
, CITY
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HOSPITAL
WAS
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REMAIN
SAME AS COMPARED 2007.
MOREOVER
, IN NORTHEAST SIDE PUBLIC CAR PARK
WAS OCCUPIED
. APART FROM THIS, IN THE VACANT PLACE OF WEST SOUTH BUS STATION WAS BUILD.
HOWEVER
,
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HOSPITAL
ROAD
WAS ATTACHED
WITH CAR PARK OR BUS STATION. WHILE, CAR PARK FOR STAFF IS REBUILT IN 2010. AS CONTRASTED 2007 MAP
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LOT OF
THINGS
WAS BUILT
OR TRANSFERS
AS WELL
AS
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LOT OF
THINGS
IS OCCUPIED
.

IELTS academic map OF CITY HOSPITAL 2007 AND 2010

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1 paragraphs
123 words
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