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Map illustrating the theater

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The maps illustrate the difference between a small theater in 2010 and in 2012. It can be seen that the theater area was noticeably increased in 2012; in addition, many facilities were added to the theater. In 2010, a cafe could be seen on the right of the main entrance; opposite of the cafe were a admin office and a ticket office. After the 2-year period, the cafe was replaced by the ticket office; meanwhile, the admin office was moved backward to the corner in order to set up new restaurants. According to the maps, the auditorium remained unchanged after the innovation; howerver, the stage was significantly expanded in size. In 2010, a storage was laid on the left of the stage, and a media was put behind the stage. After the reconstruction, the storage and the media were relocated to the right and the left of the stage respectively. A hall connecting the media and the storage was established; together with new showers built next to the media.
The maps illustrate the difference between a
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small
theater in 2010 and in 2012.

It can be
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seen
that the theater area was
noticeably
increased in 2012;
in addition
,
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many
facilities were
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added
to the theater.

In 2010, a
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cafe
could be
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seen
on the right of the main entrance; opposite of the
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cafe
were
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a
admin
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office
and a ticket
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office
. After the 2-year period, the
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cafe
was replaced
by the ticket
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office
; meanwhile, the admin
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office
was
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moved
backward to the corner in order to set up new restaurants.

According to the maps, the auditorium remained unchanged after the innovation;
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howerver
, the
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stage
was
significantly
expanded in size. In 2010, a storage
was laid
on the
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left
of the
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stage
, and a
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media
was put
behind the
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stage
. After the reconstruction, the storage and the
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media
were relocated
to the right and the
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left
of the
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stage
respectively
. A hall connecting the
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media
and the storage
was established
; together with new showers built
next
to the
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media
.
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IELTS academic Map illustrating the theater

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4 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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