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The first chart gived informations about number of honey bee colonies in US from 1970 to 2010 and the second chart illustrated amount of honey producted in US between 1970 and 2010.

The first chart gived informations about number of honey bee colonies in US from 1970 to 2010 and the second chart illustrated amount of honey producted in US between 1970 and 2010. EL9yb
The first chart gived informations about number of honey bee colonies in US from 1970 to 2010 and the second chart illustrated amount of honey producted in US between 1970 and 2010. In 1970, there were four millions honey bee colonies and they produted almost 130000 tonnes honey but in 1980, there were approximately 4. 2 millions colonies and they were able to product just 110000 tonnes therefore more colonies producted less amount honey in 1980 compered to previous decade. In 1990 the number of colonies declined to 3. 5 millions although, amount of honey producted increased to 190000 tonnes, it was obvious, they could product much honey with fewer colonies. After 1990, the totally trends of amount honey and number of colonies decreased and at finally, in 2010 they reached to 1. 8 millions colonies and 70000 tonnes honey. In summary, the general trends in numbers of colonies and amount of honey produted fell down however, the largest number of colonies were in 1980 (approximately 4. 20 millions colonies ) and the maximum amount of honey was producted in 1970 (almost 130000 tonnes ). Approximate
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in US from 1970 to 2010 and the second chart illustrated
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producted
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honey in 1980
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In 1990 the
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increased to 190000 tonnes, it was obvious, they
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IELTS academic The first chart gived informations about number of honey bee colonies in US from 1970 to 2010 and the second chart illustrated amount of honey producted in US between 1970 and 2010.

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