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It is said by some individuals that unauthentic way of downloading brings some deterimental effects on music industry , whilst opponents said that there is no side effects on musicians. I will not only scrutinize both perspectives, but also my personal conviction would be given in the conclusion .

It is said by some individuals that unauthentic way of downloading brings some deterimental effects on music industry, whilst opponents said that there is no side effects on musicians. I will not only scrutinize both perspectives, but also my personal conviction would be given in the conclusion. W8wx5
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There are numbers of reasons why it
is considered
that fake downloading has catastrophic effects. One obvious is that making songs and movie is the main profession of celebrities.
In other words
, hidden talent
is presented
by artists in order to
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get
success and
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money
in front of
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an an
audience, if their customers are doing illegal activities for getting their songs and drama it is obvious that how Singer and composer will take
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money
which
is provided
by music
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companies
.
Probably
they will be unlikely to sell their materials in the markets due to having an
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awillingnessto
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purchase
.
Besides
this, it is a thing unless
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so
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consuarerarere
curious to
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see
their
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shows
by physical touch until their financial system would be not
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affect


On the flip side, there are ample benefits can
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have to
download from the internet. The prominent is, internet provide that
If 'kind' is a classification term, 'a' is not necessary. Use "kind of". (The phrases 'kind of' and 'sort of' are informal if they mean 'to some extent'.)
kind of a
platform where individuals can surf any serial according to their desires regardless of caring about visiting that place. To
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make
it more
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clear
, there are a plethora of channels that
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allow
highlighting their dramas on it. Even they
also
allocated
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money
to artists, which seems that it is a worthy source for themselves.
Therefore
, where they can
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get
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money
and a chance to
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show
their telnet
simultaneously
.
Eventually
, it is
also
a
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marvellous
way to have millions of reviews likes
as well
.
For instance
, Netflix, which is
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famous
application is
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provide
flooded of choice about each and everything to individuals from that source, they not
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only
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get
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money
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but
also
the masses give
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hundred
of review to their talent.
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.
Consequently
, by having several fans they can motivate for their career.

To conclude
,
even though
downloading music from the internet has harmful effects on them, I deem that it is a brilliant way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
each and everything by preciseness way.

IELTS academic It is said by some individuals that unauthentic way of downloading brings some deterimental effects on music industry, whilst opponents said that there is no side effects on musicians. I will not only scrutinize both perspectives, but also my personal conviction would be given in the conclusion.

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