Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

information overweight or obese adult in one country from 1965 to 2015

information overweight or obese adult in one country from 1965 to 2015 LbdkR
The bar chart provides information overweight or obese adult in one country from 1965 to 2015, while the pie chart provides data of adult population weight range in 2015. Overall, it can be seen that the number of adult who are overweight or obese increase except data in 1985 and the percentage of adult population who are obese was the highest. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, it can be seen that adult of overweight or obese from 1965 to 1985 was between 40% to 50%. the number of adult who are overweight or obese from 1995 to 2015 all rose in range of 60% to approximately 75%. Moving to the pie chart, it is clearly that weight range of the obese adult population was the highest with 34%. Severely obese adult population weight range was the lowest with 6%. The percentage of weight range which include healthy and overweight adult population was 29% and 31% respectively.
The bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
provides information
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
overweight
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
adult in one country from 1965 to 2015, while the pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
provides data of adult
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weight
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
range
in 2015.

Overall
, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that the number of adult who are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
overweight
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
increase except data in 1985 and the percentage of adult
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
who are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
was the highest.

Looking at the bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
in more detail, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that adult of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
overweight
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
from 1965 to 1985 was between 40% to 50%.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
number of adult who are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
overweight
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
from 1995 to 2015 all rose in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
range
of 60% to approximately 75%.

Moving to the pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
, it is
clearly
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weight
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
range
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
adult
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
was the highest with 34%.
Severely
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obese
adult
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weight
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
range
was the lowest with 6%. The percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weight
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
range
which include healthy and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
overweight
adult
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
was 29% and 31%
respectively
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic information overweight or obese adult in one country from 1965 to 2015

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
159 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts