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Increasing cases throughout the year .

Increasing cases throughout the year. aV5w9
The line graph illustrates about the three different areas of crime that taken place in the city Panama from 2010 to 2019 respectively. Overall, Burglary was the first most crime recorded with highest number of incidents. Second crime was the cartheft. The least amount of crime incidents were reported in robbery. Firsty, In the year 2010 burglary incidents were in an amount of 3500. while, cases were dramatically declined by the year 2019 recorded around 1450. Burglary followed by the car theft, started with 2700 cases. But fallen down to 2000 cases by the end of year 2014. In contrast, cases reported in cartheft was rosen and recorded with same number of incidents happed ned in the begining of 2010. Morevorer, Robbery incidents were relatively low when compared to other crimes. At the begining cases were about 550 and there are up and downs in the whole period. . Whereas, minimun number of incidents were about 500 throughout the years.
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crime
that taken place in the city Panama from 2010 to 2019
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incidents. Second crime was the
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cartheft
. The least amount of crime incidents

were reported
in robbery.

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2010 burglary
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were in an amount of 3500.

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while
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2019 recorded around

1450. Burglary followed by the car theft,
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with 2700 cases.

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fallen down to 2000 cases by the
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2014.
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cases


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reported
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rosen
and recorded with same number of
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in the
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of 2010.

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incidents
were
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cases were about 550 and there are up and downs in the whole period.
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were about 500 throughout the years.

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