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Income of four restaurants

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The line graph gives information about the amount of money which was earned of four restaurants, namely Delicacy, Evening Paradish, Grand Fiesta and Spicy Fortune in year. It is measured in million of New Zealand dollars. It is obvious that Spicy Fortune reached the highest point at 160 dollars in January but in December which was deceased gradually 40 dollars. On the other hand, Evening Paradish, Grand Fiesta and Delicacy increased gradually. Evening paradise rised at 100 dollars in June and continuelly moderated at 45 dollars in January and September which reached the highest point at 180 dollars of Evening Paradise in December. Respectively 100 dollars and 30 dollars of Grand Fiesta and Delicacy in January. However there were an upward trend 140 dollars and 120 dollars respectively.
The line graph gives information about the amount of money which
was earned
of four restaurants,
namely
Delicacy, Evening
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Paradish
, Grand Fiesta and Spicy Fortune in year. It
is measured
in
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million
of New Zealand
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dollars
. It is obvious that Spicy Fortune reached the highest point at 160
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dollars
in January
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but
in December which
was deceased
gradually
40
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dollars
.
On the other hand
, Evening
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Paradish
, Grand Fiesta and Delicacy increased
gradually
. Evening paradise
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rised
at 100
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dollars
in June and
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continuelly
moderated at 45
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dollars
in January and September which reached the highest point at 180
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dollars
of Evening Paradise in December.
Respectively
100
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dollars
and 30
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dollars
of Grand Fiesta and Delicacy in January.
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However
there were an upward trend 140
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dollars
and 120
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dollars
respectively
.
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IELTS academic Income of four restaurants

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
128 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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