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The impact of instant foods

The impact of instant foods 0AYrG

This diagram shows how instant noodles are manufactured and I am going to say the way of cooking instant noodles. First of all, you take flour in the storage silos and mix with water and oil. Next, you make dough sheets by using rollers, then make it strips. If you can noodle discs, you cook it with oil. After drying it, you put noodle in a cup with vagetables and spices. And the end, you label and seal. I think we often eat instant noodle because it is too easy and too fast. When I don't want to cook anymore, It is very useful. However I noticed it contains oil too much in this diagram. So, it is not good for your health. If you eat it too much, you may become sick it is too bad, so I think it is not good thing that you eat too much.

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, you label and seal.

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