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Annual museums and gallery visitors

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In the six years that are shown in the graphs, we can analyze how the visitors had changed in the museums and galleries. We can observe three different places and their annual visitors; the National Gallery, the Victoria and Alberta museum and the British museum. If we take a look, in 2007, the National gallery had the least visitors, while the Victoria and Alberta museum was rated as the most visited that same year. But in 2012, tables turned and the National Gallery got more than 15 million visitors, but the Victoria and Alberta museum only got 10 million visitors, which means that people started to visit more the National Gallery. On the other hand, analyzing British Museums' statistics, they started having 12 million visitors, but in the years of 2008, 2009 and 2010, visitors decreased around 65%. Years later, the British museum started to have more visitors again, reaching 14 million visitors in 2012.
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IELTS academic Annual museums and gallery visitors

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