Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialed in a large country town on females only.

In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialed in a large country town on females only. wO7wn
Given charts illustrate the result of a flu vaccine on women in June 1996. Overall, the largest proportion of death from flu was seen on June to August men and women compared others. Aged 65 was the most common in the number of vaccinated females risks. As for the last chart, fluenza level was observed on females. To start with initial bar chart, interestingly, women died from flu far more than their counterparts. The largest proportion exposed by females was 4 deaths in June to August, which in turn two-fold larger than that of male. The rate of death only emerged on women at 1 in March to May. In the next chart, the most proportion of general female recipients of new vaccine groups most at risk was 65 aged people which was 20% more than as opposed to babies and children. Non-vaccine was the second popular for women recepients of new vaccine groups at risk at 28%. Hospitalised, to add, was the least proportion of general level. As for the number of people in both genders inflicted with flu modestly declined after the vaccination. At the start of the period, there were the zero cases of flu. Afterwards, both gender proliferated rapidly to peak at 3500 in females and just over 2500 in males in June from this point. The tendency of flu decreased in both women and men with 2500 and 1500 cases in the final year, respectively.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Given
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
illustrate the result of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flu
vaccine on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
in June 1996.
Overall
, the largest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
proportion
of death from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flu
was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
on June to August
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
compared others. Aged 65 was the most common in the number of vaccinated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
. As for the last
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
fluenza
level
was observed
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with initial bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
,
interestingly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
died
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flu
far more than their counterparts. The largest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
proportion
exposed by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
was 4 deaths in June to August, which in turn two-fold larger than that of male. The rate of death
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
emerged on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
at 1 in March to May. In the
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
, the most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
proportion
of general
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
recipients of new vaccine groups most at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
was 65 aged
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
which was 20% more than as opposed to babies and children. Non-vaccine was the second popular for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
Possible spelling mistake found.
recepients
of new vaccine groups at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
at 28%.
Possible spelling mistake. 'Hospitalised' is British English.
Hospitalised
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
, was the least
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
proportion
of general level. As for the number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in both genders inflicted with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flu
modestly
declined after the vaccination. At the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of the period, there were the zero cases of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flu
. Afterwards, both gender proliferated
rapidly
to peak at 3500 in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
over 2500 in males in June from this point. The tendency of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flu
decreased in both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
with 2500 and 1500 cases in the final year,
respectively
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialed in a large country town on females only.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
240 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts