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The line graph illustrates the amount of three different spreads which were consumed over a period of 26 years from 1981 to 2007

The line graph illustrates the amount of three different spreads which were consumed over a period of 26 years from 1981 to 2007 bQM7B
The line graph illustrates the amount of three different spreads which were consumed over a period of 26 years from 1981 to 2007. The units have been measured in grams. Overall, the consumption of margarine and butter decreased over the given period, while for the low fat and reduced spreads, it rose. At the start of the period, butter was the most popular spread, which was replaced by margarine later, and following that low fat and reduced spreads became the most widely used spread in the final years. With regards to the amount of butter used it began at around 140 grams and then peaked at 160 grams before falling dramatically to about 50 grams in 2007. Similarly, approximately 90 grams of margarine was eaten in the first year after which the figure showed slight fall reaching 80 grams in 1986, being static at 100 grams for 5 years and finally, fell down to 40 grams. On the other hand, the consumption of low fat and reduced spreads started only in 1996 at about 10 grams which showed a dramatic rise by reaching just over 80 grams within 5 years. After this, the quantity of this spread which was being consumed fell slightly in the final years to 70 grams.
The line graph illustrates the amount of three
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over a period of 26 years from 1981 to 2007. The units have
been measured
in grams.

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, the consumption of margarine and butter decreased over the
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given
period, while for the low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
, it rose. At the
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start
of the period, butter was the most popular
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spread
, which
was replaced
by margarine later, and following that low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
became the most
widely
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used
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spread
in the final years.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
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the amount of butter
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it began at around 140
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grams
and then peaked at 160
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grams
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before
falling
dramatically
to about 50
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in 2007.
Similarly
, approximately 90
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grams
of margarine
was eaten
in the
first
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year
after which the figure
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showed
slight fall reaching 80
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grams
in 1986, being static at 100
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grams
for 5 years and
finally
, fell down to 40 grams.

On the other hand
, the consumption of low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
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started
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only
in 1996 at about 10
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grams
which
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showed
a dramatic rise by reaching
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just
over 80
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grams
within 5 years. After this, the quantity of this
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spread
which was
being consumed
fell
slightly
in the final years to 70
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grams
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the amount of three different spreads which were consumed over a period of 26 years from 1981 to 2007

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