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Illustrate the following graph which on population of sylhet city in different age level

The graph provides Information on the number of citizen in several age in sylhet city. The age are respectively 0-10, 11-20, 21-30, 31-40, 41-50, 51-60 and 60+ and the number of people is 3000 to 9000. In the graph we can see that the highest number of population age is 21 to 30(around 9000) in this city. There are almost 6000 population who people belongs to 1 to 20 years old and this number of residents is second highest. However, 60+ years of people of the number is almost 2500. There are live almost 3000 people here who are children or newborn baby and their age between 0 to 10. The 11 to 20 years ages to the number of the people are nearly 6000 and it is the second highest population in sylhet city throughout the graph. Surprisingly in sylhet has approximately 9000 people age are 21 to 30 years and this number of citizen highest in the city. The people ages between 31 to 40 higher then 41 to 50 years old people ( around 3500 and 3300 respectively). 50 to 60 years the number of population are almost 2600 in here. The senior citizen in sylhet who are 60+ years old, the number of those person are around 2500 and is the lowest number of population in entire graph.
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provides Information on the
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of citizen in several
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sylhet
city. The
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respectively
0-10, 11-20, 21-30, 31-40, 41-50, 51-60 and 60+ and the
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of
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is 3000 to 9000.

In the
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we can
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that the highest
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is 21 to 30(around 9000) in this city. There are
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6000
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who
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belongs
to 1 to 20 years
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and this
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of residents is second highest.
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2500.

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3000
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here who are children or newborn baby and their
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between 0 to 10
. The 11 to 20 years
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6000 and
it is the second highest
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in
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sylhet
city throughout the
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.
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has approximately 9000
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are 21 to 30 years and this
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of citizen highest in the city. The
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ages
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between 31 to 40
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higher then
41 to 50 years
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(
around 3500 and 3300
respectively
). 50 to 60 years the
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2600 in here. The senior citizen in
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who are 60+ years
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are around 2500 and is the lowest
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IELTS academic Illustrate the following graph which on population of sylhet city in different age level

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