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The picture highlights the process

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The picture highlights the process by which brick is produced. There are seven stages in the diagram, from digging the soil to delivering. The first step is that the clay is excavated and taken by digger, and then through metal grid is put to roller, which causes the clay to smash and to clean. Once the soil has been prepared sufficiently, sand and water are joined. Following this, the bricks are created in two shapes by wire cutter and mould. The next is that, bricks are put in the oven which dries at a degree 24-48 hrs. After being dried, the bricks are arranged into kiln. At first, the production is burned at a moderate degree with 200C – 980C, after which the brick is fired at a high degree with 870C – 1300C. And then the brick is brought to chamber in order to cooling with 48-70 hrs. The following step is that the bricks are packaged in a square shape. The last stage is the delivering bricks to stores.
The picture highlights the process by which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
brick
is produced
. There are seven stages in the diagram, from digging the soil to delivering.

The
first
step is that the clay
is excavated
and taken by digger, and then through metal grid
is put
to roller, which causes the clay to smash and to clean. Once the soil has
been prepared
sufficiently
, sand and water are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
. Following this, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are created
in two shapes by wire cutter and
Possible spelling mistake. 'mould' is British English.
mould
.

The
next
is that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are put
in the oven which dries at a degree 24-48 hrs. After
being dried
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are arranged
into kiln. At
first
, the production
is burned
at a moderate degree with 200C
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–
980C, after which the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
brick
is fired
at a high degree with 870C
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
1300C. And then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
brick
is brought
to chamber in order to
Did you mean "cool"?
cooling
with 48-70 hrs.

The following step is that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are packaged
in a square shape. The last stage is the delivering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
to stores.
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