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The illustrated map shows the plans of a public park from when it was inaugurated in 1920 and today. The park has seen a lot of change throughout the time with the removal and addition of new places and centers of attraction. The park originally has two point of entrance, one from the Arnold Avenue and other from the Eldon Street, in addition to those, a third entrance from the underground parking is added. A central seating space is created rather than distributing the seats at the park boundaries. The park has definitely seen a lot of renovation since 1920. The stage for musicians have been converted into a full fledged amphitheater. The fountain in the center is replaced by a large rose garden with seating space around it. the pond has been converted to a play area for children. The rose garden beside the pond has been replaced by a café. The garden at the south of the stage as been removed. Lastly, the glasshouse has been redesigned into a beautiful water feature.
The illustrated map
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the plans of a public
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park
from when it
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in 1920 and
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today
. The
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park
has
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seen
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a lot of
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change
throughout the time with the removal and addition of new places and centers of attraction.

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The
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park
originally
has two point of entrance, one from the Arnold Avenue and other from the Eldon Street,
in addition
to those, a third entrance from the underground parking is
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added
. A central seating space
is created
rather
than distributing the seats at the
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park
boundaries.

The
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park
has definitely
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seen
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a lot of
renovation since 1920. The stage for musicians have
been converted
into a full fledged amphitheater.
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The
fountain in the center
is replaced
by a large rose garden with seating space around it. the pond has
been converted
to a play area for children.
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The
rose garden beside the pond has
been replaced
by a café.
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The
garden at the south of the stage as
been removed
.
Lastly
, the glasshouse has
been redesigned
into a
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beautiful
water feature.

IELTS academic i love my life its now or never i aint gonna live for ever

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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