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The graph demonstrate the moderate number of total electricity production units by 5 different fuel(s) source in Australia and France during 20 years this index measured by units of electricity Looking from an overall, In Australia the units of electricity production dominated at the begin of the period than next 20 years but both of them showed high units by coal.

The graph demonstrate the moderate number of total electricity production units by 5 different fuel(s) source in Australia and France during 20 years this index measured by units of electricity Looking from an overall, In Australia the units of electricity production dominated at the begin of the period than next 20 years but both of them showed high units by coal. y7mqE
The graph demonstrate the moderate number of total electricity production units by 5 different fuel(s) source in Australia and France during 20 years this index measured by units of electricity Looking from an overall, In Australia the units of electricity production dominated at the begin of the period than next 20 years but both of them showed high units by coal. However, , in France merely nuclear power covered plenty of portion in the pie chart. Unfortunately, 20 years ago all fuel source production about bequal volume. First of all, in Australia the production of fuel source up than France in 1980 while vice venca in 2000. The coal covered highest part in both year in Australia, coal produced 50 units at the beginning of the given time then it was reached about 20 units in 20century. Hydropower produced 20 units of electricity than it was increased 16 units during this time remained 2 sources dramatically decrease and showed both of them 2 units In 1980, in French natural gas and oil displayed high amount relatively other fueld sources units this amount less about five units each other. Furthermore, next 20 years merely coal and unchanged but oil grows to five units. Only nuclear powered doing high index changes among the year about 114 units. Finally, natural gas and hydropower generated 25 and 5 units electricity, respectively orange juice to produce of electricity two units.
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the moderate number of total
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in Australia and France during 20 years this index measured by
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of electricity

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overall
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electricity
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production
dominated at the
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during this time remained 2
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both of them 2 units

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IELTS academic The graph demonstrate the moderate number of total electricity production units by 5 different fuel(s) source in Australia and France during 20 years this index measured by units of electricity Looking from an overall, In Australia the units of electricity production dominated at the begin of the period than next 20 years but both of them showed high units by coal.

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