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How you have overcome financial or social difficulties, physical or emotional adversities which might have hindered you from studying during middle and high school.  

How you have overcome financial or social difficulties, physical or emotional adversities which might have hindered you from studying during middle and high school. BLB2X
Each adversitie in life is a lesson that teaches a person to be a better. You just have to try to learn the lesson without falling into despair. This paper will examine how I overcame obstacles while studying.        It is not uncommon that the school student is hurt by classmates, the more the child is not like the others, the higher the probability that other children are not friends with him, or at all will bully him. In my life I experienced it, and became the owner of a rare allergy and poor performance. From the first moment I started going to school my classmates teased me and laughed at me in the consequences I now have a mental trauma, like low self-esteem. At first I was indifferent, but then I began to work on this problem, found a solution through hard work in school and in small things, I began to study well and do all the requests perfectly, thus I began to hear a lot of nice words, I am even now surprised by some phrases like "Well done!     I knew you could do it, you did it! These phrases are really nice, if even simple. Through simple things, I try to complement this part of myself that was broken in my childhood because of my former classmates. I understand that without the help of a psychologist will not do, but for the time being it's enough that I have done. Emotionally, of course I sometimes burn out, but I tried to hang in there, if you go to the physical side of my allergies, I have reconciled, with the fact that with age it will go away.     But now I have a lot of irritation that provides a lot of inconvenience. I'm now trying to just take care of him and if I just strain my willpower, then exercise and live a normal life is the way out of this problem Because  allergy is illness that comes from inside of body.
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It is not uncommon that the school student
is hurt
by classmates, the more the child is not like the others, the higher the probability that other children are not friends with him, or at all will bully him. In my life I experienced it, and became the owner of a rare allergy and poor performance. From the
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going to school my classmates teased me and laughed at me in the consequences I
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have a mental trauma, like low self-esteem. At
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first I
was indifferent,
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then I began to work on this problem, found a solution through
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hard
work in school and in
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small
things, I began to study well and do all the requests
perfectly
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I began to hear
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a lot of
nice words, I am even
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phrases like
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Well done!
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I knew you could do it, you did it! These phrases are
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nice, if even simple. Through simple things, I try to complement this part of myself that
was broken
in my childhood
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of my former classmates. I understand that without the
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help
of a psychologist will not do,
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for the time being it's
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that I have done.
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burn out,
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I tried to hang in there, if you go to the physical side of my allergies, I have reconciled, with the fact that with age it will go away.
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irritation that provides
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trying to
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take care of him and if I
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strain my willpower, then exercise and
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a normal life is the way out of this problem
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allergy is illness that
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comes
from inside of body.
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IELTS academic How you have overcome financial or social difficulties, physical or emotional adversities which might have hindered you from studying during middle and high school.

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