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Developments in a bookstore since 2000

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The two diagrams describe changes which have happened to a particular bookstore since 2000 up to the present. Overall, the structure of the store has been transformed significantly, becoming a lot more convenient for its users. It is also noticeable that, more developments were made on the left side of the building. There was a large section called fiction on the left side in 2000. However, this department has been separated into four sections displaying books on art, hobbies, cookery and fiction as well. The other fiction section in the rear left corner is now employed to sell non-fiction books while former non-fiction sector has been replaced by a cafe whis is located on the right side. However, the area for travel books, new publications and service desk hasn not been changed over the years.
The two diagrams
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describe
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changes
which have happened to a particular bookstore since 2000 up to the present.

Overall
, the structure of the store has
been transformed
significantly
, becoming a lot more convenient for its users. It is
also
noticeable that, more developments
were made
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
side of the building.

There was a large section called fiction on the
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left
side in 2000.

However
, this department has
been separated
into four sections displaying books on art, hobbies, cookery and fiction
as well
.

The other fiction section in the rear
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left
corner is
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now
employed to sell non-fiction books while former non-fiction sector has
been replaced
by a
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cafe
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whis
is located
on the right side.

However
, the area for travel books, new publications and service desk
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hasn not
been
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changed
over the years.
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IELTS academic Developments in a bookstore since 2000

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  American English
6 paragraphs
135 words
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