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How teenegers in one US state comminicated

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The graph presented to us information about the ways how teenagers (aged 12-19) communicate with each other. Graph consider for research only one state in the United States. As can be seen, the graph compared the period laid between 2006 to 2009 and analyzed different ways of communication like text messages, call on cell phones, talk face to face, and email. According to the graph line of calls on cell phones did not change from November 2006 to September 2009. Approximately 35 percent of teenagers still like this type of communication. Compared to this number of emails declined almost 15 percent in the 2006 year to 10 percent in the 2009 year. Getting back to the details quantity of text messages increased from nearly 29 percent in the 2006 year to almost 58 percent in September 2009 year. We can see that the line of face to face way of communication swung from almost 32 percent in September 2006 year to a peak in November 2007 year to the bottom point in February 2008 year and after this stabilized in September 2009.
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(aged 12-19) communicate with each other.
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consider for research
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one state in the United States.

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, the
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compared the period laid
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ways of communication like text messages, call on cell phones, talk
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, and email.

According to the
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line of calls on cell phones did not
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change
from November 2006 to September 2009. Approximately 35
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of
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teenagers
still
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in the 2006
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to 10
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in the 2009 year.

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quantity of text messages increased from
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in the 2006
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to almost 58
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in September 2009
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. We can
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that the line of
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way of communication swung from almost 32
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in September 2006
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to a peak in November 2007
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to the bottom point in February 2008
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and after this stabilized in September 2009.
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IELTS academic How teenegers in one US state comminicated

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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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