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how does the map describe the change of village park ?

how does the map describe the change of village park? Nr30m
The map illustrates the on a village park throughout 10 years. Overall, village park has significant changes. Some area was rebuilt more bigger and something appeared. As the island has been developed more bigger for people, which use to play like tennis court, foodball pitch. The area for children was divided to soft play area. Car park also rebuilt, it filled with 20 cars in 10 years ago but now the number increase 50 cars On the southwest of village park, picnic area was contructed under car park. Opposite there, the pond was developed, which people use boating in here. Besides, woods was dissapear and rebuit café. On the west of village park the toiler also added for people. And cycle path was buit around village park.
The map illustrates the on a
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throughout 10 years.

Overall
,
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has significant
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changes
.
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Some
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area
was rebuilt
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more bigger
and something appeared.

As the island has
been developed
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more bigger
for
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people
, which
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use to
play like tennis court,
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foodball
pitch. The
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area
for children
was divided
to soft play
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area
. Car
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park
also
rebuilt, it filled with 20 cars in 10 years ago
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but
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now
the number increase 50 cars

On the southwest of
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, picnic
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area
was
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contructed
under car
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park
. Opposite there, the pond
was developed
, which
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people
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use
boating in here.
Besides
, woods was
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dissapear
and
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rebuit
café. On the west of
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village
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the toiler
also
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added
for
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people
. And cycle path was
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buit
around
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village
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park
.
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IELTS academic how does the map describe the change of village park?

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
127 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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