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he table illustrates the rates of people using different functions of mobile phones in 2006, 2008, and 2010.

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The table illustrates the rates of people using different functions of mobile phones in 2006, 2008, and 2010. Overall, it can be clearly seen that making calls was the most used feature while recording video was least popular for mobile phone features over the year surveyed. The proportion of people using their phones for make calls was constantly the highest, remained stable at 100% in the first two years before dropped to 99% in the last year. This was followed by that send & receive text messages, rosing from 73% in 2006 to 79% in 2010. There was also a slight increase in the rate of users taking photos, from 66% in 2006 to 76% in 2010 Meanwhile, the figure for play music and play games were the lower, 12% compared with 17%. After that, its figure reaching 79% and 76% respectively in 2010. By contrast, no one using moblie phone features for search the Internet and record video until in the last two years, the proportion of mobile phone owners who searched the Internet and recorded video on their phones rose significantly from 41% to 73% and from 9% to 35%.
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that making calls was the most
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feature while recording video was least popular for mobile
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from 73% in 2006 to 79% in 2010. There was
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features for search the Internet and record video until in the last two years, the proportion of mobile
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