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ground floor of a museum between 1950 and 2010

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The two maps illustrate the innovation of the. Overall, these maps indicate several visible changes. The alternations of the beach landscape in 60 years are recognizable, including the reposition of the statue, reception counter, and the removal of entrances in certain rooms. Firstly, there used to be an entrance between the archeology gallery and the local history room. It had now been demolished, making the two rooms separated from each other. Also, the archeology gallery had been replaced by two other different rooms in 2010, called the children’s interactive zone and the postal display area. Secondly, the café is expanded into a café and gift shop, and an additional lift is situated between the café and gift shop and the natural history room. In addition, the statue, in the past had been situated near the stairs, is, later on, be moved to the center of the ground floor. And despite all the changes, the natural history room and the museum office remained untouched.
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, these maps indicate several visible
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changes
. The alternations of the beach landscape in 60 years are recognizable, including the reposition of the statue, reception counter, and the removal of entrances in certain rooms.

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to be an entrance between the archeology gallery and the local history
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. It had
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been demolished
, making the two
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separated from each other.
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, the archeology gallery had
been replaced
by two other
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in 2010, called the children’s interactive zone and the postal display area.

Secondly
, the café
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into a café and gift shop, and an additional lift
is situated
between the café and gift shop and the natural history
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room
.
In addition
, the statue, in the past had
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near the stairs, is, later on, be
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moved
to the center of the
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. And despite all the
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, the natural history
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and the museum office remained untouched.
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IELTS academic ground floor of a museum between 1950 and 2010

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