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Grange Park was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side.

Grange Park was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. 5MQQ
Grange Park was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. There was a fountain in the centre, with a stage for musicians situated centre left, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon Street entrance and a pond for water plants in the north east corner opposite. Around the edges of the park there were rose gardens, with seats nearby for people to smell the flowers and listen to music. The park has altered considerably since then. Now there is one large-ish rose garden, occupying the central area where the fountain stood, and with seats all around it. One of the smaller rose gardens remains on the north side of the park. The bandstand (stage for musicians) has also been replaced, by an amphitheatre for concerts and associated seating. The glasshouse has gone and in its places is a water feature; similarly, where the pond for water plants stood there is now a children's play area with a café nearby. Access to the park is still via the two'original entrances, but there is now third entrance near the water feature from an underground car park. Despite the apparently significant changes, the park retains the basic elements of flowers, water, seating and music, with the addition of a café and a children's play area.
Grange
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Park
was opened
in 1920, a rectangular
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area
with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. There was a fountain in the
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centre
, with a stage for musicians situated
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centre
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left
, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon Street entrance and a pond for
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water
plants in the
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north east
corner opposite. Around the edges of the
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park
there were rose gardens, with seats nearby for
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people
to smell the flowers and listen to music.

The
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park
has altered
considerably
since then.
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Now
there is one
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large-ish
rose garden, occupying the central
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area
where the fountain stood, and with seats all around it. One of the smaller rose gardens remains on the north side of the
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park
. The bandstand (stage for musicians) has
also
been replaced
, by an
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amphitheatre
for concerts and associated seating. The glasshouse has gone and in its places is a
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water
feature;
similarly
, where the pond for
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plants stood there is
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now
a children's play
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area
with a café nearby. Access to the
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park
is
still
via the two'original entrances,
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there is
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third entrance near the
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feature from an underground car park.

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apparently
significant
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changes
, the
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park
retains the basic elements of flowers,
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water
, seating and music, with the addition of a café and a children's play
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area
.
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IELTS academic Grange Park was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side.

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