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The bar chart shows the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities during 1970 to 2010. As can be seen from the chart, population in Tokyo was higher than other cities during 1970 to 2010. In Tokyo, the population increased slightly from 15 milion to just over 26 milion in the fourty year period. The population in NY went up more gradually from approximately 14 milion in 1970 to just over 16 milion in 2010. Next, The population in SH went up steadily from about 12 milion in 1970 to 13 milion in 1990 but it went up dramatically to 21 milion in 2010. Although population approximately in BB was one-third than that of Tokyo in 1970, number of people increased fivefold and it is approximately population in ToKyo in 2010. Finally, in 1970, population in Jakata is 2, 5 milion people, is the least among 5 cities, but more than 18 million people lived in Jakarta in 2010 and that was higher than New York at the same time.
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of the world’s largest cities during 1970 to 2010. As can be
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seen
from the chart,
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population
in Tokyo was higher than other cities during 1970 to 2010. In Tokyo, the
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increased
slightly
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milion
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over 26
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in NY went up more
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milion
in 1970 to
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over 16
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milion
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in SH went up
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milion
in 1990
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it went up
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milion
in 2010. Although
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approximately in BB was one-third than that of Tokyo in 1970, number of
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increased fivefold and it is approximately
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in
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ToKyo
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, in 1970,
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milion
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, is the least among 5 cities,
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more than 18 million
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in Jakarta in 2010 and that was higher than New York at the same time.

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