Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

graduate and post graduate students in 2008

graduate and post graduate students in 2008 Y2G1B
The given bar diagrams illustrate the rate of getting involve in job of graduate and postgraduate pupils of the UK after being pass out from campus in 2008. Overall, it can be observed that most graduate as well as undergraduate students prefer further study to any kinds of jobs. However, only a few numbers of people get involved in voluntary works. Regarding the choices of graduate students, around 30, 000 pupils want to get a higher education. Likewise, approximately half number of students than that of further study preferred part-time job as well as stayed jobless. But, only 3, 500 students decided to get involve in voluntary works. Similarly, in the case of post graduate pupils, 2, 725 students chose for further study whereas only around 200 students less than that decided to do part time work. However, 1625 students wanted to stay unemployed and voluntary work is still at the last with the least number of people getting involved.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
bar diagrams illustrate the rate of getting involve in job of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduate
and postgraduate pupils of the UK after being pass out from campus in 2008.

Overall
, it can
be observed
that most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduate
as well
as undergraduate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
prefer
further
study to any kinds of jobs.
However
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a few numbers of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in voluntary works.

Regarding the choices of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, around 30, 000 pupils want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a higher education.
Likewise
, approximately half number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
than that of
further
study preferred part-time job
as well
as stayed jobless.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
3, 500
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involve in voluntary works.

Similarly
, in the case of post
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduate
pupils, 2, 725
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
chose for
further
study whereas
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
around 200
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
less than that decided to do
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
work.
However
, 1625
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
wanted to stay unemployed and voluntary work is
still
at the last with the least number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
getting involved.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic graduate and post graduate students in 2008

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6band
    The figure shows the number of worker employed in three different areas in the United Kingdom between 1980 and 1990.
    The given line graph provides information about the amount of workers employed in engineering, service industries and agriculture in the United Kingdom between 1980 and 1990. Overall, the amount of workers employed in Service industries slightly rose while the amount of workers employed in agricultu...
  • 6band
    The chart shows the energy production from different sources.
    The supplied pie chart depicts information regarded to the production of energy from different kind of sources. Over all, it is lucid that the highest proportion of coal which was produced to energy, where as the least was other sources in given both year's. After having a myopic observation, it is ...
  • 5.5band
    The bar graph shows the boys and girls who particapted in different sports outside school hours in 2004
    The given bar graph compares the boys and girls who participated in different sports outside school hours in 2014. The data is given in percentage. Overall, it is clear that the maximum boys and girls participated in football. whereas, most girls were engaged in netball. Discerning the bar graph, in...
  • 6band
    The graph below shows the number of international conferences in three cities from 1965 to 2010. image. png
    The line graph demonstrates the figure for global organization in three cities in the period years ( 1965 to 2010) Overall, the number of international conferences in three cities had gradual fluctuation between 1965 and 2010. Besides, city C increased enormously from 1965 to 1995 and had the highes...
  • 6band
    number of athletes in olympic
    The chart provides information about the number of men and women participating in Olympics over a 88-year period between 1924 in 2012. Another graph witnessed how many people joined in the game in the same period. Overall, it can be seen that the both charts had a noticeable increase in number of at...
  • 6band
    ground floor of a museum between 1950 and 2010
    The two maps illustrate the innovation of the. Overall, these maps indicate several visible changes. The alternations of the beach landscape in 60 years are recognizable, including the reposition of the statue, reception counter, and the removal of entrances in certain rooms. Firstly, there used t...





Get more results for topic:
  • graduate and post graduate students in 2008